Elvis Tower
North Cikarang, Bekasi, West Java 17530
North Cikarang, Bekasi, West Java 17530
Indonesia
Phone: 0822 6012 8112
Email: dianayen2013@gmail.com
Human
Resources Department
PT
Monroe Consulting Group
Jalan
TB Simatupang Kav. 36
West
Cilandak, Jakarta
Indonesia
28th May 2017
Dear sir/madam,
I would like to
apply for the Credit
Analyst advertised on Jobstreet.com on 23rd May 2017.
I graduated with Bachelor degree in Banking and
Finance in President University. I have a year internship experience in a bank.
Apart from my internship
experience, I also actively participated in university organization such as
being a member of finance division in major association and as a volunteer in
International Office of President University. I
am very interested in financial
analyst and focus on pursuing a career in this area.
I have numerical
and analytical skills, and able to work well in a team with good communication
skills. I
am self-motivated, creative, ambitious, confident and able to work on deadline.
I constantly keeping tab of
assigned work with my team and finishing the assigned job before deadlines. I
always up-to-date with the macroeconomic conditions in order to accurately
analyse the financial condition of a company. I
am good in Bahasa Indonesia
and English (spoken and written) and a basic communication skill in Mandarin. Having those experiences and skills make me an ideal candidate for this job.
PT. Monroe Consulting Group as a big company with more than 80 offices around the globe will be a great platform to showcase and improve my skills. I
would like to do my best for
your company.
Please find
enclosed my CV. If you require any further information, please do not hesitate
to contact me.
I look forward
to hearing from you.
Yours sincerely,
Diana
hallo diana, your cover letter is good, but I suggest you to change the last sentence on the first paragraph by: I'm interested in financial analysis and so on and also in the second paragraph: I have "a good" numerical and analytical skills :)
BalasHapusThankyou Handi for your suggestion :)
HapusBasically your cover letter is good. But Diana, I think you've must to mention what position or department you applied for.
BalasHapusThankyou Ryadi for your comment. But i already mention i want to apply for credit analyst :)
HapusDear Diana,
BalasHapusI see your way of writing the cover letter is really good. You input many things about your university and internship life. That's great. Your grammar and spelling are also nice. Good job!
Thankyou Elvira :)
HapusSuch a good cover letter. Well done. Keep up the good work!😉
BalasHapusThankyou Jes
HapusHi diana, I think your cover letter is well writting and easy to understand. Hope you'll get the job. Goodluck !
BalasHapusThankyou :)
HapusHi,Diana!
BalasHapusGreat Cover letter you made there!
But, I think its better to elaborate a little more on the good communication skills. What do you mean by stating a good communication skills there?
Good Luck!
Thankyou Jason for your suggestion :)
HapusDear, Diana. I found you have very good at writing, from what I have seen through your cover letter. Moreover, you elaborate well between your skills, experiences, and so on. Need to be notice, I suggest you may replace "I would like to do my best for your company" with "I am positively will do my best for your company", because it shows ambitious. Overall, you have done it well :D :) Keep improving~
BalasHapusThankyou Inan for your suggestion :)
HapusHi diana!
BalasHapusWhat a great cover letter that you wrote
However there is a grammar error in which you said "i always up-to-date". The correct sentence would be "i'm always up-to-date"
Keep up the good work :)
Hi diana, i think your letter is great, but i think you need to put your work experience or maybe the events you've ever participated. Good Job!!
BalasHapusThankyou for your comment
HapusHoi Diana
BalasHapusYou'r cover letter is good because you have a really big passion in doing banking and finance subject and it can be find clearly in your CL. it will make the HR department can find easier which part of division that you will take in your job later on.
Thank you for your comment :)
HapusHi Diana! I have read your cover letter and I think the overall is good. However, maybe you can mention the name of Bank you had your internship on to score some points by the company you applied for. Keep up the good work!
BalasHapusThank you for your suggestion Miranda :)
HapusHi Diana. I have read your cover letter and I think it is well organized. However, for the "HR Department", it will be better if you use "HR Manager" or "HR Director". Overall, your cover letter is good. Good job, Diana. Keep improving!
BalasHapusThankyou for your suggestion Selvi :)
HapusSince the job vacancy i found is from Jobstreet.com website, i do not know the exactly position in HR Department who will access my cover letter :)
Dear Diana,
BalasHapussuch a good writing! I can see from your grammar, vocal and so on you arrange it very well. I think for your best writing in the future you can add experiences in some events or club did you had join before! bur for overall I like it! keep it up Diana!! :)
Thankyou Ecik :)
HapusGreetings Diana. I wonder why most of the time I always commented below Ecik and my opinion to hers is more-less the same. You made the CL in a well-organized yet neat manner that make people reading it feel interested in you. Therefore it is such a great CL and hope we can help each other!
BalasHapusThankyou :)
Hapuswell done Diana ;) your CL is awesome
BalasHapusThe recruiter must be impressed :D
but for me it will be better if you mention what is the bank you intern in
hehe
keep it up honey :*
Thankyou :)
HapusElvis Tower
BalasHapusNorth Cikarang, Bekasi, West Java 17530
Indonesia
Phone: 0822 6012 8112
Email: dianayen2013@gmail.com
Human Resources Department
PT Monroe Consulting Group
Jalan TB Simatupang Kav. 36
West Cilandak, Jakarta
Indonesia
28th May 2017
Dear sir/madam,
I would like to apply for the Credit Analyst advertised on Jobstreet.com on 23rd May 2017.
I graduated with Bachelor degree in Banking and Finance in President University. I have a year internship experience in BCA bank. Apart from my internship experience, I also actively participated in university organization such as being a member of finance division in President University Major Association and as a volunteer in International Office of President University. I am very interested in financial analysis and focus on pursuing a career in this area.
I have good communication skills, numerical and analytical skills, and able to work well in a team. My communication skills and teamwork skills are well demonstrated in my voluntary work and organization experiences. I am self-motivated, creative, ambitious, confident and able to work on deadline. I constantly keeping tab of assigned work with my team and finishing the assigned job before deadlines. I am always up-to-date with the macroeconomic conditions in order to accurately analyse the financial condition of a company. I am good in Bahasa Indonesia and English (spoken and written) and a basic communication skill in Mandarin. Having those experiences and skills make me an ideal candidate for this job.
PT. Monroe Consulting Group as a big company with more than 80 offices around the globe will be a great platform to showcase and improve my skills. I am positively will do my best for your company.
Please find enclosed my CV. If you require any further information, please do not hesitate to contact me.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours sincerely,
Diana